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Veterans have a unique set of circumstances to draw upon when putting together their application essays. A Veteran is likely to have been many places, in many situations, and seen many things that the average high school senior simply can't imagine and for which he or she has no frame of reference.

Here are a couple of tips for how best to use your military experience in your application essay—and (perhaps more importantly) some thoughts on what  not  to do.

DO mention your leadership ability

Leadership potential might be the number one character trait that schools are looking for in applicants. Proof that you've taken on serious responsibility and have a high level of maturity is a good indication for those in admissions that you will take your education seriously and will go on to do great work post-graduation (and then make millions and donate back to the school, of course). As a Veteran, it is likely you have led a command of some kind—make sure this is touched on in your essay piece.

DO NOT tell this boring story: I went to teach them… but it turned out to be  they  who taught  ME

There's a particular essay that all adjudicators and admissions committees dread. It goes like this… I was employed to teach people/children in a remote village/urban center/small rural area. I went into it thinking I would be educating them, but in the end it was  I  who learned from  them.

Admissions officers hate this essay. Why? Because it doesn't really say anything about you as a person, and the story is not as original as you might think. Careful of this theme… it's deadly.

DO talk about challenges you faced

It's very likely you have dealt with questions and situations that most people have not. Illustrate how you used quick thinking and skills to overcome problems, and how you became more mature because of these decisions.

DO NOT get too dark. Leave out deep personal tragedy

Of course it's good to talk meaningfully about your experience, but this can go too far. Abuse, depression and death are striking subjects and therefore you might think they are good fodder for an essay. After all, the idea is to provoke a response, to make sure you are memorable. Unfortunately, an essay that focuses on these topics does not serve you well. Similarly, psychological trauma that may have been suffered during military service is not great for your essay, not because it's not important to your character, but because it tends to take the reader out of the narrative and usually doesn't connect very effectively to why you'll be a good candidate for college. So often essays that focus on dark subjects go down a trajectory that leads away from your achievements, which is what these pieces  should  highlight. Never stray from a path that keeps you talking about why you are an IDEAL  candidate.

DO tell your specific story

It's important to tell your story—not just one of general military life. Your narrative may seem relatively commonplace to you because it was spent in the company of people who were participating in similar activities, but the details of your service are unique and interesting to admissions officers.

DO NOT feel like it is out of place

Some people with military background feel awkward about telling their story, feeling it is exploitative. Not only is it sensible to use your military life in your essay, it's likely if you went into the service right out of high school, you don't have much else to discuss.

DO highlight technical skills you learned

In your years in the military, you likely were given highly technical jobs and responsibilities that will look very impressive to laypeople. Make sure to talk about these positions and give some details as to how these might help you in a future career post-graduation.

DO NOT forget to seek help

If you need advice or just someone to go over your application with you, talk to an education services officer. And make sure you visit the military education center and explore the VA website. There you'll find insight on how best to utilize the  Post-9/11 G.I. Bill  (also known as Chapter 33 benefits), the  Yellow Ribbon G.I. Education Enhancement Program  and  other programs designed to help Veterans finance their education .

Full understanding of these programs might be a good element to include in your essay, but more importantly, be sure to take full advantage of these programs.

And finally, DO get college credit and discuss that on your essay!

Submit a DD-214 form to make sure that your full military experience is included with your applications. Some of your experience might help you gain college credit and that might be a selling point to universities to which you apply.

Follow these tips, and you're sure to have a stellar application. And you can feel confident in the fact that there are many institutions that are eagerly awaiting to accept young men and women who have served our country.

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United States Naval Academy (USNA) Essay Prompts and Tips    

September 27, 2023

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With an acceptance rate of just 10%, getting into the United States Naval Academy and officially becoming a midshipman in Annapolis is no easy task. After all, how many colleges require a nomination from a member of Congress? Those brave young men and women who choose to navigate a supremely challenging admissions process do so in order to later dedicate a portion of their adult lives to serving their country. This blog will offer admissions-related advice on how to approach the lone, two-part USNA essay.

(Want to learn more about How to Get Into the United States Naval Academy? Visit our blog entitled:  How to Get Into the US Naval Academy: Admissions Data and Strategies  for all of the most recent admissions data as well as tips for gaining acceptance.)

When applying to an institution like the Naval Academy that rejects more than 9 of every 10 applicants, you need to put maximum effort into every area of the application, including the supplemental essays. Below are the USNA’s required supplemental prompts for the 2023-24 admissions cycle along with our advice for composing a winning essay.

US Naval Academy Essay Prompt – Part 1

The USNA only requires one essay, but you need to cover two very distinct topics in one place. We will explore these two distinct questions in two separate sections of this blog. However, we want to stress that both need to be covered in the same limited number of words, as the official directions indicate:

In a well-organized essay, please discuss both of the following:

(1) Describe what led to your initial interest in the naval service and how the Naval Academy will help you achieve your long-range goals, and (CONTINUED LATER IN THE BLOG)… …

It may be helpful to view this portion of the prompt as a higher-stakes version of the typical “Why Us?” college essay. In that category of essay, an applicant is tasked with telling their story of how they decided that ______ University was the perfect school for them. They may write about particular academic programs, courses, professors, research opportunities, internships/co-ops, study abroad programs, and student-run organizations that they will take advantage of once on campus.

Similarly, the USNA wants to see that you have done your homework and are 100% committed to life as a Naval officer. This should be a highly-personal story that demonstrates your maturity, commitment, and readiness to commit to a life in the Navy. Ultimately, joining the Navy is not a decision that anyone should make lightly and the folks in Annapolis will want to see evidence of specific experiences that led you to this conclusion.

For example, perhaps you have:

  • Had multiple conversations with a recruiting officer. Share what you learned.
  • Participated in NJROTC as an adolescent/young adult.
  • Had in-depth discussions with family members or non-family family members who served in the Navy or Armed Forces.

Items you could share related to the long-term goals can include:

  • Talk about your intended major at the USNA. Whether you are interested in political science, aerospace engineering, chemistry, or cyber/electronic operations and warfare, explain how your area of study fits into your long-range goals.
  • Discuss where you see your career in the Navy taking you. You may also want to touch upon post-Navy aims.

US Naval Academy Essay Prompt – Part 2

(2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you feel has contributed to your own character development and integrity.

To begin, it’s important to think about what type of specific words we can use to identify your particular character development. The following list may help your brainstorming efforts:

  • Perspective
  • Open-mindedness
  • Self-regulation
  • Emotional/social intelligence
  • Persistence
  • Enthusiasm and vigor
  • Adaptability

Next, you want to chronicle a singular personal experience that led you to grow in one or more of these character-related areas. Use your life experience to show rather than tell the Naval Academy how you have grown into a person of high integrity. Examples can come from a job, school projects, athletics, NJROTC, or a family experience. In short, the thing to keep in mind here is the Latin quote “Facta, non verba” which translates to “Deeds, not words.”

How important are the essays at the United States Naval Academy?

Overall, the USNA lists nine factors as being “very important” to the admissions committee: GPA, class rank, the interview, extracurricular activities, character/personal qualities, the rigor of your secondary school record, the level of demonstrated interest, recommendations, and—most relevant to this blog—the application essays.

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Being around the base has helped me grow as an individual both emotionally and mentally. We have so many resources whether it's the education center because it provides a way for you to find your path in your educational aspirations. It's nice to have the library to have an environment on base for self-betterment and growing through the knowledge that's available to you. In that resource the arts and crafts center is nice to have around because you have that opportunity to delve into different hobbies and try different passions and also grow with the people around you and create new relationships. The opportunities are endless, you can build your education toolbox as much as you want and you will get nothing but support. I think, I definitely feel more in control of my life due to the communication skills and personal growth skills that I've acquired in my short time in the military so far.

In the Military, there’s no shortage of experiences that can strengthen self-esteem.

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“My job is very rewarding, and the skills I’ve developed in the Army, like public speaking, staying organized and management, have benefited my life.”

Building connections in the Military

Staff Sgt. Jada Madson understands the responsibility of being a section chief in the U.S. Army and her individual impact on the overall mission. It’s on Jada and her team to work together to protect fellow Soldiers on the ground.

She credits the Military for giving her the opportunity to grow and gain the confidence to take on those responsibilities and be more vocal — both in and out of uniform. “The increased responsibilities that I’ve gained in the Army broke me out of my shell,” she says. “I’m not afraid to speak my mind anymore.” Getting to learn a variety of skills is just one of the reasons Jada enjoys being in the Military. Another is the impact she’s had on her team and the satisfaction she gets from being a mentor and seeing her crew succeed. “It makes me feel so good when somebody that I supervised advances in their career because of my training,” she says.

Learning doesn’t just happen from a textbook. Discover how these service members have enriched their lives and expanded their knowledge through secondary education and on-the-job experiences.

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“Tuition Assistance allows me to focus on becoming the best dentist I can be while not having to stress so much about how to pay for the future I so desperately want.”

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Marissa is taking advantage of a tuition waiver provided by the Connecticut National Guard Bureau for all state colleges, meaning her higher education isn’t costing her anything . She’s also taking advantage of the Montgomery GI Bill Selected Reserve (MGIB-SR), which provides a stipend to pay for her textbooks as well. Marissa says the ability to focus on her academics and her military career without the financial burden is invaluable.

“The benefit of getting to go to school [with the help of financial assistance from the Military] made me a better person,” she says. “I can focus solely on doing my best work, both in my job and at school, without having to worry about debt or student loans.”

Part-Time Service, Full-Time Growth

The Army National Guard has given Cpl. Amayah Littlewolf the confidence to grow not just as a Soldier, but as a mature young adult who makes her mother, Wenona Kingbird, very proud.

When I first joined the guard I was pretty shy and not very confident because I thought like wow, I really don't belong here, like I'm never gonna make it in this. And then I went to the basic training and I graduated like one of the top students. I went to advanced individual training and I graduated one of the top students again and then I've just been excelling, and like whatever I do. I feel like I've gained a lot of confidence and some really really really good friends, they're my girls, ,y second family she's grown a lot as a soldier my confidence in her is also grown and I I know that she could handle herself I think a really big goal that's always been something that I want to do is come a noncommissioned officer like an e5 sergeant once you become an NCO you lead people and you better than guess soldiers so you're almost like a mentor I really think the military path for her is something that just fits with her it's just clicked I just see her light up when she talks about it it smells over into her everyday life I mean what parents set out for their children to do and it's a goal I feel that the military is been a big big part of that.

Leadership doesn’t just mean directing those under your command, it also means mentorship and ensuring others have the skills they need to become capable leaders, too.

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“I’m responsible for the Marines and ensuring that they’re set up for success, not only in their career, but in their civilian lives.”

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As far as responsibilities go, Capt. Perez is keenly aware of the influence he has on his Marines . “Being a leader is more than telling my Marines what to do. It’s about mentoring and helping them figure out what’s right for them, educating them on what’s about to come. And then continuing to talk to and mentor them — you’re a leader for life.”

Capt. Perez strives to make a positive impact on the lives of his Marines by giving them purpose and encouraging them in various aspects of their lives, whether that’s making certain they complete their professional training and certifications or that they sign up for their educational benefits .

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Lt. Cmdr. Jesse Harms knows support can come from any individual, regardless of rank. And his parents couldn’t be prouder of what this network has done to help him progress throughout his career.

As soon as you step into a new unit you're looking for Mentors. Sometimes you have people that are 40 years old working for you and you're 23, and those people have a wealth of experience. You're still technically the boss but they're the people that you lean on for most of your decision-making. So you learn to be humble right away and in how you go about making really critical decisions for the United States. And you learned that anyone can have information that can help make a situation better. So the most junior person, the most senior person in a unit can be your coach through a situation. It's a very small community of people that you grow and lean on for all sorts of issues in your life.

 I love that he has built a community for himself here. It was kind of how we function as a family and he's kept it up, so I feel very privileged to have the opportunity to meet the people that have taken over for me. That are growing my son through adulthood and it's special it's really a wonderful thing as a parent to look back and look at your kids and feel like wow we made good choices in his life. I just couldn't be any prouder of them.

Today’s military places great value on inclusion and an exposure to a wide range of cultures, diversity and related experiences.

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See how the U.S. Army provides for its Soldiers and helps cultivate an environment of religious diversity.

So I was born and raised in Senegal but then later on my family came to United States. My culture and everything are related and based in Islam religion and culture. So I was actually raised Roman Catholic.  Originally as I grew up I started learning more about my family's history. My ancestors were Vikings. I am the the son of a Nigerian father and Dominican mother so I was born from University uh molded by it you could say.

The United States is considered a Melting Pot. So we have all these traditions cultures beliefs, it's become part of who we are but at the same time a lot of those pieces are separate. Somebody else's beliefs are completely different from my beliefs, but that's okay. And I think the religious diversity piece is also honoring those differences, celebrating those differences, respecting those differences exactly as I would honor celebrate and respect my own beliefs.

I think it's it's super important that soldiers feel like they have their freedom they're not going to be pressured ,you know. From their leadership or anyone to believe a certain worldview. The people in my religion, they're allowing us to have a exceptional policy for our beard growth and like other religions they're allowing like turbine as long as you have definitive proof that that is truly your religion. Even if a soldier is of a different Faith than the chaplains are prepared and they will go the extra mile to accommodate and find services for soldiers to attend.

When I am not performing my Sunday service my focus is then on ensuring that everybody has the opportunity to practice their faith in the manner that they want to practice

their faith so it again it's going back to that honoring celebrating and respecting the religious diversity piece and part of that is just making sure that if a soldier has a special service that week that there's an opportunity for them to attend that special service I attend Agape Carson that's the the chapel service I attend on Saturdays we're actually right here in the soldiers Memorial Chapel if you go to the chapel Court museum at Fort Jackson. There is a copy of George Washington's letter to the Continental Congress requesting the establishment of the chaplain court.

So we have been part of the army since the very beginning. Our purpose has never really changed we've always been there to provide for the religious freedom of soldiers since 1775 and we continue to do that same mission. Honestly I've never had any issues since I joined the army I was able to do my basic training with my hijab on as you can see I'm still wearing it in here in my unit also my NCR are really understanding.

Adrian Vasquez

“There’s a big importance stressed on the value that diversity brings. Not just diversity in gender or race — in where you’re from, your background and your experience. I’ve had an opportunity, especially being gay and Mexican in the Military — all of these things are unique to me.”

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Before I joined the Navy I was a daycare teacher. 

I was initiated system my background is in criminal justice.

I can fix almost anything on a car and I could build a house from the ground up, but when it comes to computers I didn't know anything about them.

The cyberspace clove force that we're developing coming from all walks of life is a key factor to being successful at anything.

Diversity is important as far as technical problem solving because everyone's going to have a different angle of how they would like to attack a problem in using that diversity you can come to the best possible solution.

I tell my students that they are the first line of defense together even though they come in and they have you know different job titles ascites and CTS etc we kind of all merge in and blend together and we support one another.

Our learning process is extremely collaborative we have joint service students and almost every single night they're setting up study groups to make sure that they understand the material we have multiple modules where they have to work as a team in order to succeed.

My favorite thing about this experience is I've learned a lot of different things that I've never learned before I met a lot of people that have good bonds with now there's a lot of things I didn't know I was capable of until I came here.

When I got here and I was really surprised to see how everybody is together and it was all like a brotherhood and you just fit right in everybody just fits right in and if you don't we pull you in.

Every service branch offers the chance to hone one’s ability to respond in the best possible way to high-stakes scenarios.

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“[My] experiences have helped me realize I can handle more challenges than I ever imagined.”

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Petty Officer 3rd Class Anthony Pappaly spent his first two years in the Coast Guard on a patrol boat. He balanced deck maintenance, navigation and rescue swimming with other daily tasks. “During that time, I definitely gained a lot of confidence in my abilities to stay calm during challenging situations,” he says.

That skill has been a huge benefit for Anthony’s current job: public affairs specialist. “Each day is different. One day I’m working on social media campaigns in the office, the next I’m creating a video on boating safety,” he says.

Collaboration and connection with fellow service members are key components of a successful, rewarding life in the Military.

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“Networking has opened up so many doors for me in my military and civilian life that wouldn’t have been open otherwise.”

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Networking is an integral part of Air Force Reserve Tech. Sgt. Juntranek Powell’s human resources role. “My job is about taking care of our unit’s members,” she says, “so I get to meet a lot of people and learn about the work they do.” These relationships were incredibly valuable for her career path. “I was considered for and got a particular role because I had networked with the supervisor and she liked my work ethic,” she says.

Working collaboratively and with respect for fellow service members are core, critical components of what makes the Military function effectively.

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“We learned that having close camaraderie is critical to the overall success of the mission because it helps us communicate effectively.”

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Air National Guard Airman 1st Class Marissa Airoldi works on a team that repairs and maintains fuel systems for cargo planes and fighter jets. “We are constantly working together in this job. One person reads the step-by-step orders, one person makes the necessary repairs and the other monitors the fuel levels.” Marissa’s training taught her team-building skills to prepare her for this collaborative environment.

Service is a serious commitment, but it also offers the flexibility to balance work, education and family in equal measure.

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“I’ve learned how to balance everything so that I have the opportunity to do the homework I need to do, but also have moments to relax.”

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While serving part time in the Army National Guard , Spc. Chris Mendell is also a full-time student at Columbia University. Though his schedule is busy, from playing club hockey to analyzing intelligence and studying neuroscience, Chris has developed ways to manage his time effectively. “In the Military, I learned about this tool called backward planning, which allows me to organize my daily schedule in a way that works for me,” he says.

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By Joy Turner

Posted on Sep 7, 2018 7:37 PM EDT

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In honor of the start of college admissions season, I’m offering some tips I learned during my time as an admissions application reader and writing consultant tailored to help veterans write college application essays that actually stand out.

Answer the question

In the military, we’re taught to write memos and SOPs in a straightforward and technical manner. Still, I’ve read dozens of college admissions personal statements from veterans that tell a wonderfully engaging story about their time in the service, but fail to answer the questions asked in the essay prompt.

This issue comes up a lot especially for applicants using an essay template to apply to multiple colleges. Don’t focus on telling me about a personal challenge you overcame while in the military if I asked you to talk about why you chose to apply to X school. As a good practice, go back and read the essay prompt after you’ve written your personal statement or essay, then underline each instance in your essay where you directly answer the prompt. This will tell you if you’re on track or not.

Show, don’t tell

Use every opportunity to tell a story. Admissions staff aren’t interested in reading a list of your accomplishments as if they’re on a promotion board perusing your military personnel file. Instead, tell a story that leaves them wanting to know more about you and what you accomplished during your military service or in your personal life.

As with job interviews, I recommend applicants implore the STAR method – which will provide details about the specific situation, task, action, and result of the story you are telling in a logical order. Reading a list isn’t necessarily interesting, but reading a story can be. Being interesting is what gets you an invite to the next cohort. Give the admissions readers a reason to want to meet you in person by telling them a story that is personal, engaging, and thought-provoking.

Start with bullet points

If you’re having trouble figuring out how to tell your story, I also recommend starting with bullet points. When it came time to write evaluations for my soldiers as a platoon leader, I often started the process by listing 3-4 bullet points under each section on the evaluation form which allowed me to concisely articulate the soldier’s accomplishments and begin to create a narrative about their performance.

For personal statements, outline the story you want to tell from beginning to end using bullet points. Creating an outline will allow you to clarify your thoughts and identify where information might be confusing to the reader (remember most people have not served in the military and have no concept of rank or MOS).

Often, college admissions applications serve as the first-time veterans have an opportunity to write about their service and it can be daunting to get started. The content of the bullet points can become the skeleton for your essay paragraphs and allow you to easily connect ideas and shape your story.

Don’t repeat information

Admissions readers know you have a lot of awards and have traveled to various countries over your military career because they can easily read this type of information on the resume that is submitted with your application. Don’t repeat it over again in your personal statement and supplemental essays. The admissions staff wants to know how you differ from the other 100 applicants who have also won awards or worked in foreign countries, what makes you unique? Talk about what you can bring to the incoming cohort as a veteran and individual that’s going to make an impact and increase the knowledge base, culture, and prestige of the institution.

Colleges are as interested in what benefits you can provide them as you are about what you will get out of the deal. Communicate in your personal statement what distinctive role you will fill, what value you bring to the classroom and your future profession, and how you will enrich the experiences of your classmates.

Be specific and stand out

Most applicants say at some point in their college application essays that they are “hardworking” or “passionate about making the world a better place”. Neither of these attributes is unique to veterans or servicemembers, nor do they particularly stand out as demonstrative of a person’s character to application readers who are reviewing 1000s of applications. To succeed in college, every student SHOULD be hardworking and passionate about their studies or a broader cause. Instead of relying on generic application clichés, write about your personal motivation for joining the military, how your identity and life thus far have informed your professional goals, or about what impact you personally hope to have on the world around you outside of your military service.

Remember, it’s perfectly fine to discuss your military service in your personal statement despite the stigmas veterans sometimes face in our society today. The important thing to keep in mind is that the application essay is a representation of you on paper and one of the only opportunities you get to make an impression before you arrive on campus. Just like in a job interview, it’s essential you demonstrate your unique value and why you deserve a seat in the (class)room.

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Example 1: "my journey to serve", example 2: "leadership in action", example 3: "resilience in the face of adversity".

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Military Experience: Sergeant Major Essay

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There are very many aspects of life and different experiences that leave their trace on the person. Military experience is very unique compared to other ones. Not everyone can deal with the pressures and action that is going on in the field and on the base. A rank of Sergeant Major is considered to be a high one and the person must have a reputation of a responsible and knowledgeable individual. The duties in tactics are very important in the military setting. The fact that the maintenance of synchronization between 6 Battalions was one of the primary duties proves that careful selection of the person for this position has taken place. With such great responsibility comes a lot of pressure in making sure that all the needs and requirements are adhered to and the men are ready for any situation. This position of authority forces the person to become a better leader, as the others are looking up and following the directions of the individual who was entrusted with such an important task.

Being an Operations SGM “with little to no experience” must be challenging. This sort of job encompasses two very important things. One is to control and establish a relationship with the team and the other one is the knowledge needed for such a position. Very often the actions of a group of people closely depend on the information and example they have received from their leader. It is a unique position, to be the Operations SGM, as it requires a constant examination and analysis, not only of the fellow men but also of the self and own actions and attitude. The ability to learn quickly, come up with the best decisions, and be able to explain and demonstrate the skills, which are required, is a task that not everyone could handle. Training is a very important part of any job and especially for a Soldier. The simulation of real-life situations and the familiarity with tactics and plans of action prove extremely useful when a similar moment takes place. It is known that the training that army personnel receive is very serious and only the best and brightest can withstand all the pressure and training.

The challenges that were faced, can be considered a good thing and a positive experience. 20 years is a great number of years devoted to such a profession. This means that the job must be rewarding and interesting. The many positions of the leader show that there were numerous times when the leadership role had to be proven and the outcome was positive. Also, the different types of positions illustrate how diverse an individual must be to take on so many skill sets. It seems that all the experience was beneficial to provide the best information to the soldiers. The preparation for battle is the most important part and any mistake could be severely punished. A lot of care must be displayed when learning new materials and systems of operation. The duties seem very specific and it is implemental to have some form of background in such tasks. To be responsible for the training of 3500 Soldiers is a challenging task and a person must be very strong and educated to provide the best coordination and advice.

One indeed has to be skilled in the communication and understanding of others when dealing with training or coordinating a situation. Ordinary citizens greatly rely on the army and the people who make the defense of the country and world peace their duty.

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Military Experience in Personal Essay

<p>I will be applying to several American colleges as an international student this year. I have served in the Army of my country (which is in Southeast Asia) for 2 years, and I have gained a lot of valuable lessons and experiences from being in the military, mostly about overcoming adveristy.</p>

<p>Would you recommend that I write about what I learnt from my time in the Army in my Common Application essay? I am afraid that it might come across as very cliche because I gather that a lot of other applicants would probably write about overcoming adversity as well, even though they may not have served in a military.</p>

<p>I would appreciate any feedback/advice, and maybe tell me how I can use my experience in the Army to my advantage in the application process.</p>


<p>You have a unique experience that other applicants do not. Be careful not to trivialize that experience by turning it into just another version of the same old “overcoming adversity” essay. How did that experience change you? Is there any kind of insight you picked up through that experience that has changed the way you view people? Your essay might be more powerful if the adversity part of it is simply the backdrop to what you’re really talking about rather than being the point of the essay itself.</p>

<p>writing about experience in the military is hardly cliche for a college essay.</p>

<p>were you conscripted, by chance?</p>

<p>Thanks for the advice!</p>

<p>Yup, I was conscripted. It is mandatory to serve in the military where I come from.</p>


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